2007年10月19日 星期五
Retell The Story - Yee Men Tze: the Son of Destiny
There was a rich man who had three daughters. All of them are beautiful. The rich man asked his daughters what they wish to be in the future. Both of first and second daughter said, “My future lies in your hand, father.” But the last one declared, “ I’m the only one who can decide my future.” The rich man was irritated by this arrogant answer. So he found a beggar and planed to let his daughter marry him. The third daughter burst into tears. The rich man’s wife gave a small box of pearls to her; she could not help more but cry. But the daughter told her that she would show her father what he is doing now will not change her life. The beggar had no place to stay and the only place the beggar could think of was a haunted house own by his cousin. The third daughter took out some of the pearls and wanted to sell them to get some food and furniture. These pearls let the beggar thought of some white things at the temple. They found and stuck his hand into the hole. An old man appeared and told him that he just could take only a handful, the rest of them belongs to Yee Men Tze. The beggar quickly grabbed a handful of pearls and ran back home. That night, both of them had the same strange dream. So they examined the roots they dreamed closely, they found a hole covered with weeds. They finally found two jars and opened the lids carefully. One jar was filled with gold and the other one with shiver. They bought the haunted house and had a son a year later. They asked the rich man to name the baby. The name” Yee Men Tze” he named was the old man said at the temple before. They went back to the temple and got a lot of pearls.
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Hi there Daphne. I see a problem here with "Scatterposting:" you have many entries but they are all on the same day. I cannot count but one post per day, unless there is some special reason for writing so much all at once. Please can you explain? These stories seem sort of bizarre to me; are they something like Chinese fairy tales? Of course they cannot be true, right?
Make sure of your tenses. Also there should be no space between the quoted line and the quotation mark, as in this:
“ I’m the only one who can decide my future.”
There are other places where the writing is less than smooth, but more later. . .
Chris O'Brien
Hi teacher, some of my essays were Chinese fairy tales, but I was not plagiarize stories. I was reading it, and I rewirte it by myself. I am not good at writing, so I try to learn how to express myself from imitate the story. I use my own word to express the same meaning. I think it is a good way to learn.
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