2007年12月23日 星期日
Winter vacation part1
Time is running so fast, this semester remains only one month. In my opinion, winter vacation is my good chance to earn money. I am used to do the short part time job during my winter vacation since I studied at senior high school; although it only has one month, for me, it’s enough. My mother doesn’t want me to do the part time job during the school time; she thought the job will affect my grades. She was very supporting me to do the part time job during vacations; because she thought it is a good chance for me to recognize more people and cultivate good temperament. I had ever been the salesman in the shoes store; my boss told me that if I wanted to earn money more, I had to promote the shoes actively. Similarly, the boss of the clothes store told me the same conception. I think it’s a good way to bring up my speaking; I had to talk with customers and answer all their questions fluently. It is not easy. I had ever been a waitress in the restaurant. In this restaurant, all the employees like a family; my boss told me that the most important thing was let all our customers got the greatest service.
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Hi Daphne, I have been looking through the blog and found an impressive 20 entries for the 2nd period, 10/15 to 11/25. However, for the third period, I only found 6 entries (11/26 to 12/23). Following those six, though there were twelve more from AFTER the last period ended. I think I can count six of those as making up for the missing ones of the 3rd period.
I see a comma splice right at the beginning of this particular post, and a misplaced subject in the same sentence; it should be an impersonal subject: "there is only one month remaining in this semester."
"I am used to DOING" would be the right form of DO for the next sentence, but it's the wrong verb anyway. "I am used to working a part time job during my winter vacations, because I've been doing that since I studied at senior high school; although it only lasts for one month, that's enough for me. ...She was very suppportive of me..." "I was once a salesperson at a shoestore..." Lots of little careless errors that you would catch if you read more in your free time, I suspect.
"My boss told me that the most important thing was TO let all OF our customers HAVE the greatest service I can give them."
Grade for the second grading period will be an 87.
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